1. 12 REASON WHY YOU SHOULD ATTEND THIS PROGRAM
“Reason” should be plural.
2. He is in the development phase of launching a book publishing company which will published and distribute his leadership and business management books, audio and video products.
Too awful to even edit. But, of course, I have to. All right.
“Which” should be “that.”
“Published” should be “publish.”
And, for clarity, I’d stick another “and” in between “management books” and “audio and video products”: leadership and business management books, and audio and video products.
But—believe it—the best thing to do is rewrite completely.
3. In the 1970’s, 70 to 80 percent of all civilian and military aviation accidents were occurring as a result of human error. (From someone who charges $10,000 plus!)
The plural of a year is formed by adding an “s”: 1970s or ’70s.
4. 2/3 of career professional don’t enjoy their work.
Don’t start a sentence with a number if you can help it, and never start a sentence with a fraction. Plus, “professional” should be plural.
5. Topic Development: Right Story, Right Time to Throttle Your Expertise into More Business
This is not a sentence but a sentence fragment (since it’s a title, that’s okay). However, to “throttle” means to choke, as in “try to kill,” which is not the right word (at all) for this sentence.
6. Throughout history there’s been leaders who have shook the world with their passion, voice, message, and charisma.
“There have been leaders,” not “there has been.” Leaders conjugate correctly.
7. She knows what will work, and will not work, in order to see growth using brain-based, differentiated instruction and inclusive co-teaching.
What the heck is “brain-based”? That’s about the stupidest sentence I’ve ever seen.
8. Being a member of the Miami Public Speaking Association has it’s perks.
It’s = the contraction of it is or it has. (Not many “perks” there!)
9. Stress serves you, which is it’s true purpose.
It’s is not the possessive of it is. It’s is the contraction of it is or it has.
10. “Its the number of minutes in each day”, she says.
Two mistakes: Its should be “it’s,” and the comma needs to be inside the quotation marks.
11. In 2011, he found his beautiful bride Margot and together they paid off over $115,000 in debt in just 2yrs and 6 months!
This is a comma splice: you need a comma after “Margot.” Spell out all whole words up to ten, and don’t miss the space between the number and “years.” And “years” should not be abbreviated anyway.
12. His passion is making a difference in people’s lives by teaching critical thinking skills that leads them towards self-sufficiency.
“Skills” is plural, so “leads” should be “lead.”
13. These organizations represent some of the best public speakers from across the country and has helped booked speakers at dozens of events at corporate, non-profit and educational institutions.
Noun-verb mistake: “organizations” is plural, and “has” is singular.
14. The average employee will spend 3.2 years of their life in meetings.
Noun-pronoun problem: “employee” is singular, “their” is plural.
15. Personal branding can make a huge difference in a student being able to differentiate themselves from competitors that are vying for the same job offers and open positions.
Again, noun-pronoun problem: “student” is singular, “themselves” is plural.
16. These events are much more intimate than our public offerings and often impromptu as we hear of a speaker who is in town and willing to share their time.
Same thing: “speaker” is singular, “their” is plural.
17. Have you ever met someone who had a great idea but they weren’t effective at delivering their message?
And again: “someone” is singular, “they” is plural.
18. In this fascinating, interactive and fun workshop, every person on the team learns to discover and use their strengths to reach team goals—even “impossible” goals.
Same thing: “every person” is singular, “their” is plural.
19. She was very organized and prepared wonderful handouts that each participant could use to identify their strengths, weaknesses and fears in regards to public speaking.
One more time… “Each participant” is singular, “their” is plural.
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