Mushy writing in The New York Times

As communicators, we must strive to be precise. Specific is terrific when it comes to communication. The writer of the quote below should have cut to the chase and said “woman” here, as opposed to the less precise “person. ” It was a missed...

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So, as I walked her down the aisle (a very long aisle I might add), I did what any father might try to do – make her forget about her nerves. I could feel her arm trembling as we took our first steps. I leaned over and whispered in her ear, “Have you ever wondered why...

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You know, when you’ve published more than a dozen books and have a host of support staff at your beck and call, there’s just no excuse for this. … I responded to him by saying “Yea, I’m lucky, let me tell you the secret to my luck…” “First, I...

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So, as I walked her down the aisle (a very long aisle I might add), I did what any father might try to do – make her forget about her nerves. I could feel her arm trembling as we took our first steps. I leaned over and whispered in her ear, “Have you ever wondered why...

The Rule About “Rooms”

When a prefix for “room” has one syllable, the compound word is one word: bathroom, bedroom, boardroom. When a prefix for “room” has more than one syllable, then there is no compound: living room, dining room. This headline is incorrect....

Comma hunt!

With thanks to The Washington Post for this sentence. Many of the changes in biomarkers occur at an earlier age but are similar to changes seen in adults in the broader population who develop Alzheimer’s later in life.  How many commas should there be in the...