So, as I walked her down the aisle (a very long aisle I might add), I did what any father might try to do – make her forget about her nerves. I could feel her arm trembling as we took our first steps. I leaned over and whispered in her ear, “Have you ever wondered why you park on a driveway and drive on a parkway?” That was so obviously a random statement to make at that moment that she looked at me curiously and said, “What?” I replied, “Or, why is that you send cargo by ships and shipments by car?” The shear randomness of these questions started to make her chuckle. So, I went on to say, “why do you think we call them ‘cookies’ when we actually ‘bake’ them?”
This is one paragraph in a very messy article with loads of mistakes, particularly comma mistakes. However, I just don’t have the patience today to do a complete edit, and so am contenting myself with this particular paragraph.
Mistake #1: So, I went on to say, “why do you think we call them ‘cookies’ when we actually ‘bake’ them?”
The “w” in the “why” should be capitalized.
Mistake #2 (and this is the biggie!): The shear randomness of these questions started to make her chuckle.
Ouch! It’s “sheer,” not “shear.”