I like reading The New York Times. It was practically the happiest day of my life when I signed up for “complete access” on the internet, and, oh, joy! the Sunday edition. The Sunday paper edition!
I do like commenting about articles. I wrote a comment today about this article. Obviously, it’d be better if you read the article first, so here’s the link:
Well, that didn’t work. So sorry. Please Google
Exotic Marble and Opulent Finishes Lure Buyers
plus The New York Times and you’ll find it. And then, please come back and see what I wrote, which is right below.
Never loath to display my middle-class background, I have to admit that I got bored and didn’t finish this article. That kind of stuff doesn’t hold my attention. Do you know what I mean? Show me a good abandoned-dog-undergoes-miraculous-transformation video however, and I’m there until the happy or bitter end.
If I had money, there are so many wonderful things to do in the world; this is not how I’d choose to spend whatever it was I had. On the strength of that thought, I just donated $100 to Hope for Paws, out in California, and I invite you to do the same. But this article? Boooor-ing!
Oh, on a happier note, this is a great editing job. Just look at all those hyphens! A thicket of hyphens! And the numbers! Whew! All students of punctuation should study the commas as well, though that early missing (cough, cough) serial comma combined with the “Goldman Sachs” phrase was a little too bereft of the little dears. This is a perfect example of when to use a serial comma! In my opinion. Still, with so many honey-hued (gotta love it!) opportunities for an editing misstep or two, this is a masterpiece! Trust The New York Times to set the standard. Again.
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Having said all that, I do hope the Times won’t mind if I publish the “case for the serial comma” sentence here. See how the items just tumble against each other? I follow with the serial comma version so you can see how easy it is to distinguish between the start and stop of each item listed.
Original:
It’s quite different from anything else that’s being built in New York City,” Mr. Despont said of the project, which is being developed by Hines, the Pontiac Land Group and Goldman Sachs, with apartments priced from about $3 million to more than $70 million.
Mine:
It’s quite different from anything else that’s being built in New York City,” Mr. Despont said of the project, which is being developed by Hines, the Pontiac Land Group, and Goldman Sachs, with apartments priced from about $3 million to more than $70 million.
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